Intimate Point of View

Have you noticed that in some books it feels like you're actually there? Well, yeah, of course! But the question is, why? Well, it's probably a combination of a number of different things, but one big part of it is probably something called Intimate Point of View.
Here is an example of IPV(Intimate Point of View)
Arianna groaned inwardly, trying to hold the tears back as she stared at her now soggy cereal. That certainly hadn’t been the lecture she’d been expecting. Now she might have to move to a different city-state! Maybe even to the other side of Gaisma!
Here is that same paragraph, except without the IPV.
Arianna groaned inwardly, trying to hold the tears back as she stared at her now soggy cereal. That certainly hadn’t been the lecture she’d been expecting, she thought. Now she might have to move to a different city-state! she exclaimed. Maybe even to the other side of Gaisma! she finished with a groan.
Now, which one feels like you are the character? The first! DUH.
How to do it:
-Start with an action so that people know who is thinking.
-Take out all the 'she thought' 'she saw', everything that the person wouldn't be thinking. (You wouldn't think 'she sees this amazing animal' you would think 'that's an amazing animal.')
That's it! And no, I didn't think this all up by myself :) My favourite author, Bryan Davis, uses this technique and I watched a youtube video he did on it.
Hope it works for you!

Writing Tips

Okay, any aspiring writer just needs to watch this video! It helped me so much!
Here is part one:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oKw80FwZJU0&feature=share
And part two:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lGLIXrchlls&feature=related
Yes, it is two hours long...But it's totally worth it!
The talk is done by my absolute all time favourite author: BRYAN DAVIS!!!!
Hope you like it!

Fresh Begginning

I deleted all the old posts yesterday, so this blog is officially started over!
Sorry to everyone who wanted to read the rest of the story...It'll just have to be left forever a cliffhanger because I've stopped writing that book...But I can garuntee that this new one I'm writing will be even better! But...I won't be posting parts of it here :( I want it all to be kept for the finished copy.
So what is this blog going to be then? It'll be sometimes posts about good videos on writing to watch or good books to read, or sometimes I'll be asking about stuff I need for my book, like names or descriptions.